Revising Sentences

Today I have been learning about the word DRAFT. DRAFT is like a acrostic poem. Each letter of this word means something in writing. Today we have been focusing on the D.D stands for delete. In class Miss Paton shared with us a piece of writing in which we had to delete, take out words and change sentences. Here is my piece of of writing.

Miss Paton’s copy

Miss Paton has a cat. His name is Oscar. He is a tabby cat. Oscar can be a pain in the neck. He likes to sniff my rubbish bin. He always come to my house wanting food. Oscar likes to fall asleep on my couch. He does not like my laptop computer. He would rather sit on my lap. Oscar would like me to give him the attention.

My copy

Miss Paton has a cat named Oscar. He is a tabby cat. Oscar is a pain. He likes to sniff my bin. He always comes to my house eating. Oscar likes to sleep on my couch sometimes. He dislikes my laptop   computer. He would like to sit on my lap. Oscar would like me to give him attention.  60 words